*** Auntie Seedent still can't find her kinfolk Here is a construction that illustrates the problem with pronouns not matching their antecedents: Some judges don't allow children in their courtroom, so they're forced to languish in the halls ... The way this sentence is written it is the JUDGES who are forced to languish in the halls. The second "they" cannot refer to children. Here is one way to fix that: Some judges don't allow children in their courtrooms, so the CHILDREN are forced to languish in the halls. *** Parallel troubles We can make our writing more readable if we pay attention to parallelism. Phrases linked in a sentence should be parallel in grammatical construction. Here is an example: ... he'll break only for gas and to sleep (joining a prepositional phrase and an infinitive). If we were to make this parallel, we could write: ... he'll break only for gas and for sleep (two prepositional phrases). OR ... he'll break only to get gasoline or to sleep (two infinitives). Or in another instance: For information or to register, call 555-1234. It becomes: To get more information or to register ... OR For information or registration ...